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And I'm done. :D

The train was moving to and fro, giving me jerks now and then. The phrasing in this is a bit awkward and could be clearer. Right now, it's not clear ...

Done.

The first thing I noticed is that there's no clear separation between the author's notes and the start of the chapter. You need to fix that. forty degree Celsius Should ...

No problem, and done.

Here I am, as requested. That’s just how it is, I guess. Delete this sentence. It's redundant since you already have "That’s how it is for me, anyway." I remember ...

We should write him a letter. Dear Pat Buchanan, Thank you for your generosity in lending your name to the public consciousness. You will be most pleased to learn that ...

Once upon a time, I offered in my signature to review people; all they had to do was PM me with their request. Quickly did my inbox fill with requests, ...

My impressions in (rough) order of occurrence: Messy. Is that a vampire in the back? With half a head? What are they standing in front of? What's with the dark ...

I liked the first stanza the best. In particular, the memory being more than a dream image was just lovely. The last line, though, seems to come out of nowhere, ...

Hello there, and welcome to YWS. I see you're pretty new, but you're off to a good start with the reviewing. :D As far as your poem goes, it was ...

Usually a lack of punctuation and capitalization annoy me to no end in poetry, but I really didn't mind it with this one at all. Some things that caught my ...

To be perfectly honest, I did not like this poem at all. The rhyme is very obviously forced throughout the entire poem, it is inconsistent (though you did separate the ...

Part 2 It was a day later and well past dark when the fox finally awoke. The prince was roasting a pigeon he had slain with a well-aimed stone over ...

Was intended for Rosey Unicorn's Beginnings of Magic contest, but it wound up being more of "this is what magic is" rather than "this is where magic begins". *sadness* It's ...