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The constant repetition started getting on my nerves, to be absolutely honest. Maybe it wouldn't irritate me as much with music, but since that isn't exactly possible, formatting this so ...

Undrank drink. Should be "undrunk". Easiest way to keep it straight is that you say "that drink was not drunk" and not "that drink was not drank". In which this ...

Suzanne was quite thorough, and her advice is sound; I suggest you listen to her. All I really have to add is some advice regarding formatting and imagery. The format ...

I tried to read this, but I couldn't because the formatting made my head hurt. Everything was just lumped together into one mass of letters. It didn't help that the ...

Hey there. Since this was written so long ago, some of the things I mention may not apply to you now. Still, there are a couple of things about this ...

And I am finished. Your story was an absolute joy to read, by the way.

She wished she could fly away with them, away from this woman and this world that doesn’t understand her. The "doesn't" doesn't quite sound right. It's not grammatically incorrect, but ...

Originally written for Event #5: Villainelles of the 2010 Writing Olympics. I've tweaked a couple of lines since. Still, this was so much fun to write. XD The Last Flight ...

And yield grapes, ? That line came out of nowhere. Five boys and their manager, And brown to the rainbow, And live off mountain air, And spring morning's sweet, sweet ...

I like how you described the moon as night's single eye. That was quite poetic and apt. As Snapes already mentioned, you've got a pretty odd rhyme scheme, here. I ...

Terzanelle~! Ever since that event, I've come to love terzanelles; they're so much more variable (for lack of a better word) than villanelles. our thoughts and minds are array, This ...

What's love ? How does it feel ? Is it even real? Why are does almost every line end with a comma, even when it's inappropriate? Poems are punctuated the ...

Hey there. This isn't a bad start, but one thing these lyrics could really benefit from is proper punctuation. Right now, it's really difficult to follow what's going on. Even ...

Hello, there. You seem pretty new, so if I may suggest that you get around to reviewing other users? Doing so will help you get the points you need to ...

The first thing I noticed was the punctuation, or, more accurately, the lack/improper use of it. Secondly, you had a number of spelling and capitalization mistakes which did not make ...