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Tigad The king was not pleased as he strode through the halls to the kitchen. Listening to petitions had been mind-numbingly boring, per usual, but at least it meant that ...

I'm not quite sure what the title has to do with the poem, or how the reversal of letters ties into it, but the title does read nice backwards, and ...

I have one burning question about this poem, and that question is "Do you, or do you not, have a rhyme scheme?" Actually, make that two burning questions, the second ...

Heya, amu. Here I am to save this work from lonely one-review limbo. And if you know me by now, you know I'm going to be brutally honest, so read ...

I never imagined these thoughts would trouble my most internal organs. That's... quite an opening line. As Auteur already pointed out, it's a bit long. Also, "most internal organs" just ...

Hey there. I'd just like to say first that you have a very interesting take on this poem with how you describe various intangible concepts by taste. Unfortunately, these intangible ...

The chat log doesn't work for me. :wink: That's what text documents and copy-paste are for. ;P

I'm not sure why I join exactly, and it varies from situation to situation. Sometimes I'll register straightaway. Other times, I'll never delurk. Restricted content isn't much an incentive for ...

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Were this to be, the Only semblance between you and me, Like jemjive pointed out, this stanza is broken a little awkwardly. I suggest moving the "only" to the end ...

To be absolutely honest, I took one look at this and went "There is no way I am reading this." That was almost a week ago. Now, I have nothing ...

Hi there. Like Snoink already mentioned, this poem is very vague. There's nothing concrete that your readers can directly relate to or that will stick in their minds, so this ...

It's kind of hard to give any concrete advice without seeing the draft, but what I've found is really effective for controlling pacing and tension is word choice. The way ...

Garis "What's important is that, as the future King, I have many more resources at hand than, well, anyone else! Surely a murder doesn't need to take place in this ...

I am saddened by the lack of jokes about the Kübler-Ross model/the five stages of grief. Seriously guys. You had a perfect segue for them early on. I am disappoint. ...