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The first stanza was great. The rest of the poem, not so good. The sudden jump from "she" to "I" needs more of a visual cue. Adding in a section ...

First thing I wondered: why are there chapter headings? Those are more features of a story than an essay. *name of public school removed to protect privacy* Next time, I ...

In one way or another, it has somehow affected you too . The "too" is redundant. Whether it was something drastic like losing your job (comma) or something not so ...

Alright. This poem can be summed up in one word, and that word is confusing. Especially near the end. You've got too much going on at once, and no clear ...

Sounds like you've got a case of exposition overload in the beginning. Do we really need to hear all the regrets and angst first thing? Probably not, and it's difficult ...

For being my favorite two-timing minion with chronic backstabbing disorder.

You have a great story here, but (and it's a big but) it's hidden and almost ruined beneath the inconsistent rhyme and the bland imagery. The punctuation also doesn't help ...

Just the gist is enough! In a poem as short as this, every spelling mistake you make, even if it's just one, is extremely noticeable. It never hurts to check ...

Hello there. Rosey was quite thorough with the length and imagery, so I shall be focusing on one aspect of poetry I feel is particularly essential: punctuation. Now, normally a ...

XVI Just as the gates in the Harrowing were torn and tossed from their hinges, down tumbles the tower of hubris, struck by the hand of a wrathful God. It ...

Finally managed to get in. Had to clear all YWS-related cookies and then log in, hit the logout button on the log-in redirect screen, and then log in again.

I link when I remember, and I occasionally browse. Lots of good stuff in there (though some articles give me the itch to edit).

It's (n^2 * n) because I typoed and hit * instead of +. As for the first question, the easiest way to solve it is to work backwards. Assume that ...

I had a nice long explanatory post, but IE ate it. *grumbles* I don't have time to tackle the first problem right now, but I can help with the last ...

The Friends and Points sections could use some updating, and I think a direct link to the chat rules would be good for the Chat section.