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If you care about civil liberties and want fewer murders, the answer isn't to use the death penalty - it's to ban guns. Hello non sequitur. Also, I think you ...

Why does this post give me deja vu? But yes. Good points (as always).

The entire first stanza made me go "Blah." It was dull, bland, and repetitive. Most of the imagery was common and vague, with the exception of glowsticks as "tacky light ...

Lazy summer haze infects the pathways and alleys of this town a yearly disease, and our cue to come alive. I really liked the idea of summer haze infecting pathways ...

I liked how you tied the beginning and end of the poem by just slightly rephrasing and repeating the first line. It was a nice contrast. That said, your punctuation, ...

The essence; though, it may be scribbled. The essence of what? Also, you repeat "essence" three lines later, which is far too close considering how short the two lines in ...

Agreeing with ilyaeelz that the poem was a bit overwrought, and that it tried too hard to be clever. Personally, I felt the ending was too intrusive and obtuse. You ...

There's only so many gifts and donations you can give out There are?! Giving gifts is so much fun! If you're having a hard time finding people to give gifts, ...

I can understand not wanting to call your elves "elves" since people have a preconceived notion of what elves are like, but why not call humans "humans"? There's no point ...

Forgive my myopia, but I thought you a man with your sunglasses beard and lolloping stride when we passed in the hall.

Garis He was beginning to cramp in his spot in the tree when he saw Princess Arianna storming into her room. Only she didn't storm in the sense of stomping ...

Letters From A Farmer In Pennsylvania, by John Dickinson in 1767 or 1768 First, "Letters..." should be either italicized or placed in quotations depending on the length of the work. ...

Abigail has already pointed out the spelling errors, so I won't repeat them. However, I do wonder why certain words (like Run) are capitalized at seeming random. For a tribute, ...

"Decline" is repeated in the second line. It was too repetitive. I suggest rephrasing the poem so that there is no need to repeat "decline". "Whether slow and slipping, passing ...

VII The horses run rampant in front of the chariot, like unchained desire, unfettered and free and running at cross-purposes. The driver holds not the reins; he is lost in ...