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You can attach the pictures to your post. Down at the bottom of the post page, there's a tab titled "Upload attachment". Hit that, hit "Browse", find the image on ...

Note: You misspelled "compliment". loath ...a "Loath" without the "e" is adjective while "loathe" with the "e" is the verb. the ... graze I'm assuming you mean "graze" as in ...

I like how you made use of the colors. It was a nice touch. That said, your capitalization and punctuation were inconsistent, which is a shame because I think that ...

This struck me as being a bit simplistic. Rather than showing us the emotions, you just tell us the actions. There's nothing particularly emotional unless you consider sudden screaming and ...

I'm not sure what to make of this. On the one hand, it's so far-fetched that it's hilarious, but on the other hand, it's so far-fetched that it makes absolutely ...

Help me accomplish, free me from anxiety - Accomplish what? You might want to trade out "accomplish" for a more definite, for lack of a better word, word like "succeed", ...

I still lay in the grass Should be "lie" since it's an ongoing action. Don't you just love irregular verbs? For the most part, I liked the imagery in this; ...

Hello there. I am Kyllorac, and I'm here to review you this fine evening. First things first, the structure of your poem could use work. How a poem looks and ...

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There is an article on apostrophes in the Knowledge Base that I think you might find helpful. You can read the article here. Basically, plurals do not have apostrophes. I ...

It’s addressed to Estrella Jaime. That's a rather interesting name. No return address Missing punctuation. I return inside my house This just struck me as odd phrasing here. I blame ...

First things first, you used a lot of tildes (~) to separate your notes from the story, and they stretched the page. In the future, you might consider using fewer ...

Concerning revisionism: Japan has a long history of being revisionist. Any and all events deemed damaging to the Japanese people or the Emperor have been expunged from historical documents, with ...

It's absolutely depressing seeing how we're going back to pre-20th century ideals, and otherwise moralizing through domination by numbers, and not evidence or practicality. Then quit your bemoaning an

There's a second definition of a Mary Sue, and that is "gratuitous author self-insert". These Mary Sues serve the purpose of author wish-fulfillment and are particularly common in fanfiction. But ...