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The one major change I see that is in major needing is paragraphing. Giant blocks of text like this are not very reader-friendly, and having them is a great way ...

Never say never is all I have to say. The most recent film adaptations of Lord of the Rings were pretty darned great, even though they deviated from the books. ...

I... don't know what to say. The dialogue is so horribly unrealistic and unbelievable. NO fornicating while I'm here or at least warned first... Aside from the latter half not ...

That's... a lot of commas. Wow. And as one who happens to like commas, using them whenever, and wherever, grammatically possible, I'm going to have to say that that, right ...

I'm assuming Ayo is a name? In which case, you should have a comma after it. Whenever you address someone directly in writing, their name or form of address is ...

To be honest, I didn't much like this story. You danced around the source of conflict for so long, by the time it was revealed, I no longer cared. There's ...

This review is a completely pointless review whose purpose is to be a review only in characters because nobody can rightly review a piece that has been deleted, and seeing ...

Starhunter was quite thorough in his review, and I second everything he said. I have to admit, the last paragraph was my favorite. All the mentions of the small events ...

It is a sort of perfection This line really does not flow all that well to my ears. It sounds stilted, so it sticks out negatively, and considering you repeat ...

Keep in mind that when you multiply variables with exponents, you add the exponents together. a + a = 2a, so your answer would be x^2a. And you can have ...

Heya, Angie. Since you mentioned you posted your poem up, here I am to review it. Now, since this is one of those poems where you're supposed to be honest, ...

There's always the "I posted it myself and I can prove it to you by logging into my account on that site. Would you like me to show you?" point ...

Yay for goofs with the drafts feature...

Hello there. I realize the contest closes today, so while this review might not be able to help, hopefully you'll be able to apply with I say to future stories. ...

Well, you seem to have your theme already (America = Melting Pot), so it's just a matter of figuring out how you want to approach it. Have you tried brainstorming ...