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Hello there. Just dropping in to leave a review since it's always so sad when works go under-reviewed. Before I start, I just want to mention that I haven't read ...

First impression: those are some rather massive paragraphs. Can you break them up a little? It would make it easier to read. The general rule of thumb for paragraphing is ...

Here as requested to review! The first thing I have to say is nice formatting. The divider images are a very nice touch. But when I’m King, you’ll know where ...

CLONES!!!

If you want to get published then why must you care about what the reader thinks? Why can’t you get published if you just write for yourself? In order to ...

There's also the matter of how there is far more than 6,000 years worth of human history. Although the oldest known written records of history only go back about 5,000 ...

As Crow above me already mentioned, there were quite a lot of grammar mistakes, such as the one in "Her loves messing in her lab and reading." That said, between ...

The premise is interesting enough, and there is definitely potential here, but the execution is in dire need of work. The main issue is the pacing. Up until about the ...

You have ideas here, but that's all they are: ideas. There is no development of these ideas to distinguish them as your ideas rather than someone else's. One way to ...

Personally, I'm of the opinion that benefit should be directly proportional to effort and effectiveness. Someone who puts greater effort into accomplishing a task and succeeds should reap more benefit

You should still be able to go into your first post and edit out all the text. You'll have to put something there, like [Deleted], but once you get rid ...

Hunker down and wait for the storm to blow over. Maybe make plans for NaNo.

Is your post in the correct forum? The blue box only appears if the topic is in one of the novel subforums. If its not, just send one of us ...

This piece was so heavily laden with description, it felt choked. Now, having a lot of description isn't necessarily bad, but in this case, a lot of the description was ...

the kind of place that uprising musicians go to play I do not think that word means what you think it means. "Uprising" is synonymous with "rioting" and "revolting", and ...