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I've managed to keep at a project for a good half a decade even though the ending was one of the first things I wrote. I'd say, if it keeps ...

Kyll>> How come? Do you know why you need meat? Nope. I know for certain it wasn't the aggregate protein or iron requirements as I was eating plenty of legumes, ...

I'm seconding everything Lumi said, especially with respects to the firm foundation and flow issues. There's a genuineness, a genuineness that's quite brutal at times, to this poem that makes ...

There's also a rather mundane case of poisoning. She's hungry (or not) before the final battle. A supporter of the Queen (who she might find physically attractive) gives her a ...

This was beautiful. I honestly have nothing to critique (which is very rare), aside from complaining that this section was far too short. And it's really not so much a ...

I've got nothing against vegans and vegetarians, and for a while I attempted to go vegetarian, but that wound up ending rather horribly. I happen to be one of those ...

Hey there. As shiney already mentioned, the bold and large size of the font make this not very nice-looking, and it's distracting to your readers. How a poem appears is ...

Misspellings in poetry are so passe; properties grammatical are now the way. Though the dithering's amusing, and the wanton ego-bruising, we should all make up — kiss the smack talk ...

What about something spiritual, like the ability to act as a conduit for the dead? Depending on who/what possess the character during that time, the potential for murder is a ...

Dry husks crinkle, the death-brown blanket I stand on — the trees shed their skin.

Hey there. Since bexy was so thorough on the spelling and grammar, I won't be mentioning anything about them, except to say that proofreading is always a good idea. Most ...

This read more like a list than a poem, and to be honest, I'm struggling to find anything about it that could be considered poetic or even story-like. All I ...

Also, the longer the reviews you write, the more points you'll get. The maximum is 50, though if you review a work with no reviews, you can get as many ...

This is a very interesting format for a chapter. Since it seems to be a poem, I'll be reviewing it as such. The first thing you might want to do ...

First impression: Wow. Long. But once I started reading, I was hooked. You might want to consider breaking this up into parts so that it's more manageable for readers. Anything ...