Kakali

Around 4, probably, running around my back yard doing the exact same thing we were doing now. Our families have always been close and see eachother often. Spell numbers out, ...

I liked it! I might read the rest of them if you put them up! Well my first thought was "There sure is a lot of dialouge." So just to ...

Thanks, and don't worry. I made sure to leave plenty out. :)

Based on the feedback that I have recieved so far I have decided to edit it a little. Thanks Shauni and MeadowLark! In the distant future, everyone has the choice ...

Go YWS!! I just love YWS. I hope everyone has a very good time on here! My writing skills have increased (I hope) from being on YWS! I plan on ...

I'll try to be there. :) I know what I'm gonna say!

I never was a normal kid. You don't know how many times I've heard that sort of beggining. I tried to not let it show, but all my efforts were ...

“Hi Hail.” “Hey Jake” this is Jacob. My best friend sense, like ever. My name is actually Hailey; he calls me Hail to shorten it. Sense my name is so ...

First of all, I would like to say that this is a great opening! I read it all the way through! Just add a little more detail where there should ...

Here's a better picture of him:

I photoshopped this picture and it looks kida scary, but I had fun with it :D

I only noticed a couple things that popped out straight away. 1.The claws on the top of the wings are unproportional 2.Her boobs.....uh, there kind of lopsided. 3. And the ...

Wow! I'm the first one, eh'? Well, here goes it. 1.The best parts I'de have to say are the ears, I can NEVER get them right, (unless there on animals) ...

OKay, one more, its not over yet. When I first opened this, I wasn't looking too hard and it looked like a photograph! (No joke!) So I was Uh-mazed when ...

Okay, this is the last edit before I start chapter 2. ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Claire groaned as she slowly awoke from her unpleasant slumber. She felt a