Kaijudospartan

Okay, just pointing out a few mistakes.... My mother used to say that my body was capable distracting an entire army Correction: My mother used to say that my body ...

Well, a pretty good story, though I had some trouble reading the funny accents. Also, Shadowcat has what kinds of extra powers, exactly? Also, if you please, you could make ...

Alright! The next chapter is here! Just so you know, you can put these into a novel format so your readers don't have to trawl through the first few pages. ...

Well, well ,well. Assassin's Creed is a great game, so there's no problem with self inserts. However, there are a few problems... Cassy had respect for the man; she couldn’t ...

Hmm. This part of your novel is practically the equal of a filler chapter. It doesn't have much action, but it's still a good one in terms of explaining the ...

Ah, the old cliffhanger method. One of the few ways to ensure your readers keep reading. Well, as for me, I feel that you did a great job here. There ...

Ooookay. Although you have a very interesting plotline, not to mention good grammar and spelling, except for that part where you spelt 'run' as 'rune'. A rune is a character ...

A dark force splattered the walls with gore. Elongated white remains littered the floor, that the Legionnaire deliberately trod on as he approached the two trembling women. "So you thought ...

*Glares* You know me, Samp, and I know you. The question is, why are you using Ridux Aeon's character(and not mine)? *Smiles* Lol nevermind. I KNOW WHERE YOU LIVE. Don't ...

Hmm. What can I say? Your grammar seems to fluctuate between present and past tense. A way to rectify that, -at least, the way I do it- is to set ...

Ah, Assassin's Creed. One of the best games in the world. As to your fic, the setting and plot are good. However, the flow of words seem to be a ...

Hey, great work. Keep at it. Have you considered a career in poetry?

Ok... A bit too much mushy stuff for me, but the action and description are good.

Great story you have here. A noticeable lack of spelling and grammar mistakes, and good action scenes. Hope to see more of this stuff.