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Re: The Train
Here we are, at the junction where real splits into artificial. Trains don't often come here anymore; these tear-rusted rails are like Black Death to them, but if we be ...
Dec 8, 2011 -
Re: I Beat the Bully!
I can totally sympathize with Casey's story, lol. This was okay. I mean, yeah, it was meant to be more of an inspirational story for people who get bullied than ...
Dec 7, 2011 -
Re: Love is real
Yeah. You've got the back cover of your story down smack, and that's great, I guess, but now you have to fill in the blanks. This isn't much of a ...
Dec 6, 2011 -
Re: Inferno Chapter 1
How goes it? Good? Good. This wasn't bad. It was a start; that's what you were aiming for, that's what you got. It wasn't a great one - as I ...
Dec 6, 2011 -
Re: Scarlet Ivory
Hi. So, before I get to critique, I really want to commend you on this. Your descriptions were breathtaking; in a way they remind me of Lovecraft, but from another ...
Dec 6, 2011 -
Re: My Son is Gay
I don't know what I'll be able to give you in this review that will in any way vary from the horde of praise you've already accumulated. I just felt ...
Dec 5, 2011 -
Re: Dinner.
Alright! So. This was pretty good. You have a nice taste for imagery; phrases like "cerulean silk,/with forgotten frayed ends" evoke strong mental portraits of what is going on, and ...
Dec 5, 2011 -
Re: creativityrules is the Featured Member for December!
Yay! Good job.
Dec 2, 2011 -
Re: The Metaphor of the Tree
I Mom told that the kids in that one school west and north and a desert from here take questionnaires about suicidal thoughts and motives, but I told her that ...
Dec 2, 2011 -
Re: Flash Fiction Fight!
I liked the way the mist curled around her when I looked at her, how it draped over her face like a wedding veil; she wasn't pretty, but I if ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: Hit the Penguin [2]
...323. *hides face*
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: Help me help you. Request a review! (closed, for now)
November 18th is okay, I presume?
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: Cloud Dreams
I think there is sunlight behind these clouds, but they're too thick, too old and gray; it's like the passing of time between success and I hate them, these scars. ...
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: Tanya's Ghost
Please just left-align this and leave the color black? Changing the format does nothing to make your story any better, and in fact hinders the reading more than anything. I'm ...
Nov 18, 2011 -
Re: Mathew_Beta.exe (2 of 2)
I couldn't bring myself to review the individual parts. I really think that the story can't be judged without having a view of its entirety. I was at a loss ...
Nov 17, 2011