Kafkaescence

Saw this in my bi-monthly-or-so exploration of the site and felt I had something to say regarding th subject. I was speaking with a classmate (an avid reader, by the ...

Hi. It is a bit cliched, but I wouldn't call it dumb. I hate judging stories harshly with such a narrow window as a prologue, because there is so much ...

Huh. Well. Flash-fic sport stories, in my experience, invariably end in the same way. I am for this reason inclined to dismiss this as hackneyed and only review it as ...

Well, that made sense! Not really. This is to help familiarize yourself with your novel, then? My tip would be to actually get started on your novel. Preliminaries like these ...

So, did the narrators change? I agree with the previous reviewer in that that is somewhat nebulous. Narrator changes aren't bad things, and they can be quite powerful in specific ...

Mmkay. This was interesting. I'm not going to go into the scientific issues with this, because they're so manifold and blaring that it's clear that you weren't really writing this ...

As requested. Firstly, I would like to offer a humble rebuttal of Lavender's first point. Verbosity in itself is not a crime. Some of the best writers are terribly verbose ...

Right. This was kind of a good story. A little. Not really. Truth is, it ended the same way it started. No one learned anything. Narrator ends up with the ...

Um. Wow. I guess it was good. I'm assuming that its purpose was allegorical, if anything. If this reflects your opinion (which I hope it doesn't), then your views on ...

Dusk dawned in a winter haze and lay sleeping across the westerly horizon. It was cold, tooth-numbing cold—curling my jacket around the summits of my shoulders, I quickened, or tried ...

Welcome to YWS! Actually, I rather enjoyed this. You're writing was crisp and easy to follow, delving into pieces of imagery here and there, but not overdoing it. It was ...

Ear! I had a dream last night where true love and true homes were nonexistent. Fairly strong first lines, but not amazing first lines. While this is a nice lead ...

Zup. I guess this wasn't too bad. Personally, I'd move it up to the chapter one position, considering that its contents are more immediately relevant to the story than they ...

A review on this would be awesome.

Morning driving on a sun-stung Mexican highway, concrete wisps around like Sahara sand, flickers on and off through the eons. Sweat pulses like the tide, men sprouting from behind tattered ...