Kafkaescence

Lavern, from The Cave Between Lands I hear the words. The counting is finished. I stand in the middle of a grassy field. Too visible. Too vulnerable. Then I see ...

I will be the seeker. As your character, you will go hide in a place that seems fitting. Imagine the landscape however you would like to. Ready? 1...2...3...

Lavern Synder, from The Cave Between Lands I never thought I'd be in a bar. I never thought I'd bend down so low, so low as to abandon my family ...

Sorry about that. Lavern: Power is not something I crave. It is something I need. It is what I need to save Myra, and for all I know, the world, ...

Power, shmower. I like burritos.

Okay, my main critique would be, like the previous reviewer, the dialog. I just can't see the characters saying these things. The very first telephone conversation between the nurse and ...

I arrive home. The slamming door and my loud panting is enough to announce my entrance. It is hardly a house. There are only four small rooms, all surrounded by ...

This is a great poem. It is straightforward, utilitarian with its words, with just the right amount of metaphor sprinkled on top. Good job.

Okay, sorry, but those two annoying black stick things on the beach really get in the way for me, as does the slight slant of the shadows on the bottom. ...

This piece is emotional and mysterious at the same time. That's a very strong combination. Before I get into my bigger critiques, here are some specific ones: Remember the pain ...

Felix, The Cave Between Lands He would wish they were crayons, so that his brother could draw with them. But that wouldn't get him far in terms of self defense. ...

Sorry, I don't have any advice, but I do have a nice, complete edit. Forgive me if I'm harsh. I knew her because her mother was friends with my mum ...

I wish poetry was like a cup of water. I wish I could just pick up this poem in my hand and let a single drop of its contents spill ...

Nice use of rhyming and beat, but some more detail would definitely make the poem better. Metaphors are especially powerful. I would also refrain from telling us the cause of ...

This is perhaps one of the most captivating stories I have read yet on the site. And I am not joking. Though the writing is commendable, this is not what ...