Kafkaescence

As I was walking by the sea, I saw a curious thing to me, The "to me" really makes the reader feel excluded, and does not do too much to ...

You should rant more often. I'm serious. This is very good. As always, I loved your imagery, I loved your word choice, I loved this poem. I guess you're probably ...

he was a mutterer: he couldn’t help but answer the voices snatching at him for attention, stalking him like cancerous ghosts and echoing across his head. This is beautiful. they ...

I must agree with Jojo on the showing, not telling critique. You don't give any clear imagery, and though you somewhat give examples of feeling, most of it is pretty ...

This world is ending, this spectrum of colors and lights; these forests shall crumble, this skyscape, ignited by the fire of a toothless grin. When this bell tolls, when this ...

Hey Spire! Here is your review, as promised. I wonder who I am... I'm not sure I particularly like the ellipses here or on the following line. Only in very, ...

Prepare for a harsh review. I'm sorry, but this has no rhythm. The lines are much too long and the words hardly complement each other. In addition to this, each ...

When I wake, there are colors. They are familiar. Have I been here before? A face is above me. He has eyes the colors of cubes. His mouth is moving. ...

This is a very interesting poem. You effortlessly develop the feeling of the poem. One thing I am not sure I like, however, is the rhyming pattern. When a poem ...

Agh! Stop! I'm on the verge of tears! Seriously, though. This is really good: very emotional, very touching, very...well, here are my critiques. Just some punctuation issues I found along ...

I begin to rearrange the maze of levitating cubes, and I contemplate the possibility of transporting myself into the future and circumventing the tedious chore. Yet I find I cannot, ...

Great idea, Ally! God, I'm glad I started following you.... ONLY if it's not too much trouble, here's a link to my story: PS: Do you do sci-fi? I sure ...

Nice work. What I am seeing right now is a person who is being forced by some incorporeal, or else psychokinetic, "enemy" of his. The person then defies the enemy, ...

Watching my feet and being careful not to step on dry piles of leaves, I slipped silently through the unfenced backyards of quiet houses. The houses were, in all truth, ...

This a very good picture! I simply adore the coloring. You did a good job. I have two critiques: the head is, like, twice the height it should be, and ...