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Re: Simple Reasoning
Fabulous. You use simple imagery and language to create a beautiful picture - or at least, an emotion. I think you might've accidentally misspelled the subject, based on the other ...
Jan 25, 2011 -
Re: Think
I put so much energy on my work that I forgot what was really important, This is a pretty long line. time was going fast and I was u naware ...
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Re: Hieroglyphs
Broken, shattered, like a page smeared with ink, a heap of ravaged words, a crystal ball, falling into the eternal desert, a prophecy and broken glass. Smash this window, your ...
Jan 24, 2011 -
Re: High School
Hey Roth! Here I am again. This was an interesting poem. I must say that, before you read more of my review, I am not the biggest fan of rhyming, ...
Jan 24, 2011 -
Re: In Memoriam - Part III: Innocent Bystanders
Pine Springs Summer Camp had seen better days. I know what you're thinking. Oh, silly Death! I would cut out the "Oh, silly Death!" It would work just as well, ...
Jan 24, 2011 -
Re: Hands Touch
Wow! You really do bring a new meaning to poetry. This is amazing: very atmospheric, very emotional. One critique I have is that it really just runs on and on, ...
Jan 24, 2011 -
Re: Never again
I'll pick up my weapons, You pick up you're bow. *your* I'll bring the power would you bring the show? Kind of cliched rhythm, but okay.... We'll take you down, ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: We Are Alone-Edit #1!
This is great, Bookworm! Though I'll admit that I do agree with you on that it is a rough draft. When I was young I felt isolated Because I understood ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: Cyborg 3: Human
Superhuman. Civilization. Nature's Salvation: Us. Life. Redefined. We have been Designed. To thrive. To die. To start over. Skyscrapers. Metropolis. Binary tree. Necropolis. We have deleted and Taken
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: A woman, who sounded like a man? read on to find out!
I certainly agree with meg as far as it sounding more like a blog entry, but this was quite funny nonetheless. Did this really happen? Meg has pretty much made ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: Sample of My Writing Skill please comment 'Who am I really?'
This is spectacular! I honestly can't think of any criticism. Good work! I'm glad you took into account my review, but did not simply go with whatever I said. "Shallow ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: The unstoppable force
I loved this poem, but I'm a bit low on time, sorry, so I'll skip past what I loved and dive right into the critique: Over grief filled cannons cut ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: [removed by author]
Poetry is a thing that can sound pleasant to some people, and to others completely horrible. That is how it differs from stories - normal writing has a constant, unchanging ...
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: Cyborg 2: Reboot
Icon. Blinking. Commands. Hyperlinking. Charge complete. No firewall Detected. Memory. Infected. Reboot available. Starting up.... Data. Streaming. Digital. Redeeming. Walking. Mass extinction. Cause
Jan 23, 2011 -
Re: The Star
The star A bright star shines above the trees, Above the reach of wind and breeze, Wind and breeze are the exact same thing. "Wind and...(something different)" I reached but ...
Jan 23, 2011
