Kafkaescence

I am like an apple and you a knife. Cool! You slide into me Reword this. carefully, placing yourself delicately in me. Careful with the adverbs. This one does not ...

I wrote this poem while I was tired and grumpy, so do whatever you like to it. Follow this dying ember as it falls deeper into the fog, as its ...

Here I am for review number five. This was interesting. I liked it. It had a refreshing feel to it. The initial problem was well-set, and the escape in a ...

When they chained you to your post, How about "chained to your post?" did you think of duty then ? I don't know about this line.... Consider changing it. S ...

Haha! Love the optimism, Nero. Call me Kafka! You sound like a fun person to be around, and I bet your writing reflects this. Can't wait to read it. PM ...

Penultimate review! Almost there! “What about those women? Did you think about them before you did it?” The man had remained silent. Maybe he had regretted saying so much. Maybe ...

It's the beginning of the storm This line could be reworded better. And I'm watching the tempest form Nice! On the earth, the colors lack As the sky turns gray ...

You are hit by the fractal doom, shot down, lacerated, and now the car swerves away into the bloody jaws, annihilated. Screeching tires, like dominoes they fall, decapitated, a meteorite ...

“Andy!” The voice that came from outside became furious. “Open this!” Someone thumped on the door, attempting to force it open . I looked at the door, then back at ...

You know what's funny? I wasn't sure. To put things in perspective, let's say that I've had a lot of customers. I can claim seniority over Australia, the Earth Is ...

Brilliant. My arms stopped shaking. “Are you gonna kill me after this?” I heard you chuckle. You chuckled Don't think you need this. Sounds odd. . I didn't expect that, ...

It's raining again. Great first line. Why do I feel so sad when it rains? I think you could do without this line. Remember: show, don't tell. Fat droplets slide ...

One glance from across the room and immediately my heart fills in the blanks. Careful with the adverbs. Through its carefully constructed facade I notice a sparkle in your eyes, ...

Inside the cave, Nice opening line. is a creature you fear. The image is with you now freezing you in horror. Could be better. Not sure I like how you ...

I roamed my eyes around Never heard that phrase before. while lying back slowly until my head touched the pillow. A lamp, which partially lighten ed up the room with ...