Kafkaescence

Quanta "Chi...what? Huahua? Sounds like some gurgling sound one of those human things make. Disgusting. I bet a - what was it? - chee-wah-wah is one of those white things ...

I like the name. That's a good way to start out a review, isn't it? Starts it off on a high note. I have some problems with this. Firstly, all ...

Okay, now I'm just annoyed. You did it. You broke away from that cliched downward spiral. Now you're in an original downward spiral. This is waaay too early. The Oliver ...

Cold blade, warm vein, exacuting my pain. 1) You misspelled "executing," 2) "my pain" sounds off, because you really don't have to tell me that the pain is yours, and ...

To Annalane. When looking in each other's eyes, Meh. Not that original. Also, "in" should be "into." We forget the world, Again. Cliched. We set free our hearts, And throw ...

I'm back. Get ready. I liked the first chapter better. I was hoping that this story would not turn out as it seems to be. Even then, you had all ...

Int'resting. My problem with this piece is that it's too short. The transition between the MC telling about herself (I'm guessing it's a girl) and the jump to the present ...

Your moist hands like rain playing on my skin. "Playing?" Not really the right word. Scratching at my surface to see what I hide within. Your hands underneath my clothes, ...

Here I am. I have to leave-- the house suffocates me, almost like a living being trying This last part is weird - it makes sense, but the three words ...

Meh. So. There's something that this poem needs badly. Rhythm. The lines simply do not flow into one another. They connect, meaning-wise, but the sound of the lines themselves seem ...

I must once again request your services. Tear it apart, by all means. :D

Staring at the blinking cursor, My mind begins to play it’s game, Doesn't flow well with the last line. Seems detached. Also, "it's" should be "its." Thoughts swell and my ...

Okay. So, my main problem with this is the repetition. It works in some cases, but you repeat the whole "remember" thing so much that it loses much of its ...

All four reviews have been finished. Keep 'em coming....

Laura was picking at her nails, sitting cross-legged at the table, opposite his father her husband . “Your mother’s house smells, Edgar,” Laura said under her breath. “It’s from the ...