Kafkaescence

Maybe you could post a link to the edited version so I know where to find it.

:O You've got quite a lot of likes for this, Tabz! Congrats! Now. Before we get started. I am absolutely pathetic at art reviews, since I tend to be absolutely ...

I'm gonna save a spot here. Keep the attachment up until I get to the review, 'kay? Okay.

Hi. Kafka here. Grammatical errors are in red. Just close your soul Disregard the passing lies It's safer if you just stay dead Nevertheless, come be alive Its dangerous to ...

Kafka here. Time for another review. This has potential. I'll give you that. In fact, I'll give you more than that: I like the potential it has. But. There's definitely ...

*Leans back on hammock*

Ring your bell no longer. Can you review this?

Dripping from my mouth, Splashing all around. Simplistic and cliched, let alone devoid of any sense of imagery. I cover my lips with smeared fingers Too long. With shorter lines ...

This is something I whipped together last night at, like, 11:00, and I thought it sounded decent enough to submit.

This was a pretty good poem. I liked the second half, but the first half needs reworkage. "Kiss to the bones?" Usually people plant a kiss on something, not to ...

You're always wearing a mask Afraid to show the world Cliched. Try to say this in a more original way. Who you really are You never stop acting Never stop ...

*stumbles over* Could you review my short story?

Firstly, what's up with your formatting? There're two spaces between some stanzas and only one between others. This poem needs a big dose of one thing: rhythm. It seems like ...

Life is... I don't know Don't know about this. It's pretty cliched. It can be good It can be bad So bland...can you think of anything more powerful? For me, ...

Something dangerous is coming, something mysterious. Meh. Older than DaVinci, older than Shakespeare. These last two lines neither flow well nor develop the feeling any further. Rework these entirely.