Kafkaescence

Saw you didn't have any comments on this, so I figured I'd offer you one of my measly reviews. My main concern is the ending - it seemed far too ...

fend for themselves,I went off for acting. Comma, space. “follow your dreams”, Punctuation goes inside quotation marks. I can’t blame anyone else, though. It’s hard not to. Contradict each oth

Durh, I don't wear any make-up, I'm cool/a boy. Make-up sucks.

Yeah, this doesn't make any sense. Who is the figure? The resident of the household? Some rival thief somehow out on the same quest? Both are unlikely based on the ...

So this was a beautiful little piece of prose. I almost want to call it poetry - I guess it's one of those stories that is right on the borderline. ...

Be careful what you wish for, right? Haha. Sure. Lots to say on this, I guess. I'm not sure whether the aforementioned moral is what's most prominent here, though - ...

It was supposed to just be Kitty but there was a spasm typo.

There are two tricks to descriptive writing: the imagery itself and the fluency. I don't have much to critique you on as far as the first department. While there were ...

Food was scarce, leaving a constant uncomfortable pain in her stomach. The grammatical link between the first and second clauses is tenuous. Try rewording this. hypothermia Is it winter? I ...

Kind of reminds me of the Big Crush theory, what with your reference to singularity endpoint and everything closing in on the boy. I wonder if this was your basis? ...

Back. Sorry about that. I want to say I have some tangible commentary to offer you but, in all honesty, I don't. This felt more like a mini-me version of ...

Accidentally posted this when I went to click preview, sorry. :?

I entered the first paragraph of Chekhov's "The Lady With the Little Dog" and it labelled it as Tolstoy. :? In other news, it seems I write like Stephen King.

Noted.

Not that I know of. TUBM is my mom.