Kaedee

“Where is Princess Astianna? Jilia, go search for your sister in her room…oh there she is!” Asti arrived in the weapon room, out of breath, hungry, and tired. She had ...

You did a great job. The story was captivating. You were very descriptive. I found it hard to find any problems; the ones I found are mostly more minor. Corrections ...

Hey! The beginning of the story kept my attention. I enjoyed the narrator's (Elena) voice. Corrections: I found words such as 'headlock', 'staircase', and 'downstairs' that you wrote as separate ...

Nice job! This story was very well written, and interesting. I loved the man's accent and dialogue, which shows quite a lot about him. Keep on writing- Kaedee

“Lien and I are getting married.” Asti's jaw dropped. What? Had her mother gone insane? What was she thinking? Asti looked around the dinner table, to see her sisters who ...