Kaedee

Hey, mminc13...welcome to YWS! I'm Kaedee, and I'll be reviewing your story today. First of all, I was sold as soon as I heard this line: The aliens have been ...

“Just look at how he walks,” Jilia said, eying the boy almost suspiciously, disgusted. “Acts like he’s everything, that’s for sure. And I bet he’s no good at anything, like ...

Hey, I'm Kaedee. I loved the dino. Nice shading, shape seemed very complaints! The Avatar one...yes, I think you should color it in, since they (the Navi or whatever they ...

It seems like a big cliche, yes, but I posted my idea down below. Tell me what you think. Thanks- Kaedee ______________________________________________________________________________________ The alar

Hey. I'm Kaedee, here to review! This story reminds me of one that I had begun to write, then dropped. I think I will revive it again! Maybe I should ...

Not currently here...'To Dance' is being fixed! As some have said, I am trying to make it less clichey (if that's even a word!) and more personal. Will upload here ...

Yes, I'm back! You did a great job once again. *clicks Like button* I liked the way you described the part where the MC notices his amazing (may I call ...

I've gone over and edited the story a bit, as of 7/9. I've taken out a character (Lienne, a sister; she's so minor that you won't notice ^^ ) and ...

Hey, Pooja! I read your story the first time before it was edited, and didn't review since everybody got the main problems. First of all, this fixed chapter is written ...

Hey, Kanen. You did a great job with this story (Chapter 1). I was sucked in by the first sentence. Even in only a few paragraphs, I was already getting ...

Hi, MegaLizardLord! Welcome to YWS. Let's start with the good things about your story. You have a very interesting idea for the setting of your story; an island filled with ...

Thanks for the critiques...you found some things that I wouldn't see without some help! I fixed the confusing king part. At least I thought I did. :) ~Kaedee

The week passed quickly. Too quickly. Asti met with Jerr two more times. He taught her an Invisibility spell, and a minor spell that closed small cuts and removed bruises, ...

Hey! This story definitely has promise. You did a great job with the first few sentences; they suck you into the story, and make you very curious about what is ...

Hey, Aries. The setting of your story is very interesting...especially the part about the orc camps. You did a pretty good job. Here are some corrections for you: Dobliv entered ...