Kaedee

Hey, my name's Kaedee, and I'll being reviewing this piece today! Corrections/Nit-Picks: Here are some corrections for you! It seems that you spent most of this chapter explaining about the ...

Asti would catch him or her in the act, then would shake the answer out of them. "What are you doing?" Asti demand. "I thought I trusted you. I looked ...

Cheery

OK since the last person didn't post a username, I'll post one! EDIT: bad. Understand now. purplechocolate

Calypso.

One day I saw this thing I don't know what it was but it was a thing but it was something, some sort of thing so yeah well I saw ...

Blinding.

6.5/10 I wonder why this guy had been in his house for so long, but 'It was a sweltering August afternoon' doesn't really add anything to the rest of the ...

Danny! :D Okay...this is a girl. She is very defensive, and is strong for her age. She is a bully at her school. Deep inside she is very sensitive, though, ...

Sun

Hey its Kaedee, here to review! You did pretty well on the first few paragraphs. I liked them. They were very interesting, but the last two paragraphs were confusing. Here ...

Hey, it's me again.(: I would consider putting multiple chapters together, because it will give us more to review! Nothing more really happened in this chapter. The story did not ...

Hey, I'm Kaedee. This was very well written! I loved the description of the Mistress: I sighed and looked up, too. The representation of the Mistress was actually quite accurate. ...

Hi! If you get the chance, can you review this? It's Chapter One of one of my stories, Astianna. (Fantasy Fiction) It would much appreciated! Thanks- KD

Hey, jasminebells...this was so funny and entertaining to read! You talk about things that anybody who is a teenager or had been a teenager can relate to. I loved how ...