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Hey specs! I like the story idea so far. It's promising, and interesting. You seem to have a solid plot developed too, which is great. But, the main problem in ...

Hey there! Kaedee here. Run-on Sentences I found a handful of these throughout your piece, but here are some examples of what I mean. Watching as sunlight glistened upon silky ...

Hi Cer1553! The girl let out a high-pitched screech It's not wrong or incorrect to use "screech" in this sentence, but I feel like it just doesn't fit well. When ...

Heya, wolf! The first thing that stands out to me when I scan over your work is how huge your paragraphs are. xD Paragraphs like those are very hard for ...

Helloo Kaysha. Welcome to the site! My name's Kae. I'm a bit older I guess you could say, seeing that I am already 36. Yeah. It's great having members of ...

Hi Griff, Kaedee here. Overall, I think you did a good job with this being a school assignment and all. But, as Daughter said, this felt a teensy bit rushed, ...

Hai Lindsay! Kaedee here to review. Someone once said that if life hands you lemons, you make lemonade. But another someone also said that if the going gets tough, the ...

Hey-hey (Hor)izon! I'm Kaedee, or just Kae. Nice to meet you. Welcome to the site! I'm glad you joined. You sound like an awesome person. :3 YWS tends to inspire ...

Hey Daughter! Kaedee here to review! Like Alpha said, the dialog in this piece is a bit awkward. Teenagers don't really speak as formally as Eric and Brittany do. For ...

Hi Noelle! Kaedee here to review. This was sweet. I really didn't think that the mother would get her child in the end! I thought that this piece was emotional, ...

Hey neon! :3 Kaedee here to review. Okay so let ' s get something straight here. First, we ' re not real jesters, that ' s just our code name. ...

Hey littleblackdog. I'm Kae. *waves* Welcome to the site! What kind of dogs do you like? Labs? Dachshunds? Chihuahuas

Hey Mikko! Kaedee here to review. Yeah, I think this is a better start for a novel than this being just a single short story, since this doesn't feel quite ...

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Hey Dragonette! It's me again. Mainly, I wish you could add even more sensory details to your story. For example, if you did, I would be able to picture the ...