KJ

My word to describe this piece was interesting. Maybe it's just me, but I thought it got kind of boring throughout. But then again I'm not a big dinosaur person, ...

After the “little” incident up to my Nan Carter’s house I didn’t ho home Typo in there. I assume you meant "ho" as "go". It was good writing. It was ...

I don't think you should get rid of the Heaven and Hell concept. That was one of the things that I liked most about it. Good writing. But it threw ...

I think this belongs in the Romantic Fiction. To be honest, it bothered me. You write well, I thought it was unrealistic and too dramatic. I would have bought it ...

A good addition. I'm wondering what this has to do with the first prologue, but I guess I'll just have to keep reading to find out. Few mistakes here and ...

This piece of work is amazing. It has been put on my favorite's list--and so far there's only one other piece on it. Only problem was the few punctuation and ...

Very intelligently written. But you've only begun the plot, so I'll be watching for more.

For me, it was okay. I wasn't that interested. It had a Dr. Suess feel to it. It felt like you were scratching the surface of something that has potential ...

I liked it. It has a ton of potential. There were quite a few grammar mistakes, but you can probbaly catch those just by going back. You made the characters ...

Pretty decent. I liked the title, how is was short and just one word. The poem itself had a good flow, was all tied together, and didn't make me fall ...

This was good. I actually understood what you were saying, and what was happening. The words were well-put, no mistakes from what I can see. Good. I'm really glad I ...

In general, it was okay. The little details put in there were pretty cool, though. There wasn't anything that stuck out to me. Not badly written, but not especially striking ...

As she gazed out to the glittering sea, there was no stirring. She imagined an illusion, an unexpected kiss. Turning back and waving, she faced the wind. It blew through ...

My brother's name is Kolbe This line kind of bothered me--I don't exactly know why... I think it just doesn't make the main character real. I feel like he's an ...

Spaces between the paragraphs would be great. I liked the suspense-build. I also liked the red dress, the beacon in the darkness sort of thing. It's a good idea. But ...