KJ

Very compelling read. Sureal has the real critique down, so I won't bother. It wasn't exciting, but it was, as I said, compelling. Keep writing.

Lots of punctuation mistakes. Need to go back and fix those - Teh Wozzinator already gave you some good tips. As to your piece... it wasn't bad. Decent, in a ...

Hello. Overall opinion: Interesting start. There were a few things I would have changed, but unfortunately I don't have time to list them all. But one of the major things ...

Hello. This was very amusing. What captured me was your title. For some reason I thought it captivating... Anyway, good job on the comic. Keep writing.

Maybe it was just me, but I would have liekd it better if you had used the word 'ice' only once. Other than that, I liked it. Wasn't bad.

I actually already had the addition to this all typed out and ready to go... BUT THEN MY COMPUTER PERMENENTLY DELETED IT. I was so pissed that I just abandoned ...

Awww, thanks :D

Hey. Wanted to point out a few things that I noticed: They've been dating for 6 years! Yeah, 6. I don't get what they see in each other. Carly is ...

Hey. I have no time to comment, but I had to. I liked your addition. I didn't notice and grammar or puntuation mistakes, so good job on that. Wasn't boring ...

Hey. This was interesting. It wasn't exactly enthralling, but it wasn't boring. It was pretty well-written, also. Only thing is this: “I see our lovemaking has come to a close.” ...

Thanks for your help. I learned about the socks thing in school. I was actually paying attention for once! Good thing I did, huh?

You have great detail in this. I actually found no problem with it, except perhaps that there was a bit too much telling rather than showing. But sometimes such a ...

Hey. Just wanted to put in my own two bits. I thought that this was an interesting addition. My only problem with it was as GryphonFledgling said: the relationship is ...

Hey.This wasn't a bad beginning. I had only a few problems with it. In the beginning I was getting the vibe that she didn't like staying sober and having to ...

Yeah, that is interesting about the Jimmy thing. I've never seen Independence Day, so it wasn't intentional. Thanks, by the way, for your stars and critiques. Really appreciate it.