KJ

Hey. Don't have much time to comment, but I just wanted to say a couple things. This was a pretty interesting addition. I didn't like it as much as Part ...

Just a few nitpicks (and they really are major nitpicks. This story would be great even if you just ignored them all). His mysterious ailment has turned his usually tanned ...

Need spacing. I thought that this was... interesting. But you give us a bit too much of an info dump right in the beginning - at least that's how I ...

Hey. Just a few things I noticed: The stench was the same; bleach, of course. This sentence feels kind of awkward and ruins the flow you have going. I would ...

Cute and amusing. =)

A tinny voice comes from the shrubs in a strained whisper. Only error I noticed. Should be tiny. All in all, exciting and well-written. It's a great beginning. It hooks ...

Hey. Just wanted to let you know that this was pretty decent writing. It's a good start. Would cut the Italics in the beginning, however. You could let us know ...

Hey. Yeah, great job with editing. I read the whole thing. Overall impression: It wasn't bad. Interesting. I liked the wry tone you had throughout it, and you were consistent ...

It's interesting. It's kind of dull, however. I think to make it better there should be more shading, to make more sharp contrast between her cheek and the rest of ...

Wow, these were just great. What I liked most was all the color. Nice work.

Nice work. Very pretty. I wasn't a huge fan of 4, 7, or 10. They were a bit dull. But the rest were great.

I liked the third and fifth ones best. The others were just like, okay, so someone is building something. So what?

Dude, that first dog has a tongue problem. Anyway, I thought these were good. Nothing quite original about them, but cool. I'm a dog-lover, so it was especially fun for ...

Hey, I like this. It's neat. Very creative, too. Who would've thought to take a pic of a lightblub?

Hey. I thought that the last two were pretty decent, and I don't know how you can improve them. As to the first, I liked it, but I think it ...