KJ

Hmmm. I like it. This could be neat in a book, all decked out like a ancient newspaper. I'm excited to see where you go with this. Keep posting.

Fly. I ' ll see you soon. My notw glided from my palm, hovering for a second or two before dropping into the stream. Taking my coat of , I ...

Hey, I'm KJ. Personally I like the second idea better just because you seem to have develoepd it more. You have an idea of where it will go. The first ...

NITPICKS: "Help! Help!" she gurgled, sounding as helpless as possible. "Wait! Do you have a place to stay?" He asked her. I noticed that you do this a lot throughout ...

I admit I'm not much in the mood for nitpicks, but I stopped by just to give you one quick observation: Your sentence structure is rough. Jerky. Try to connect ...

I love the tree. But if you have Photoshop, play around with it a little! Darken the tree leaves, makes the textures stand out, you know? And as for the ...

I like it. It's very pretty. I wonder if you could darken the sky and enhance the fireworks, though?

Hi, ThornedRose. I just wanted to let you know that I like this. There's not much, but I honestly wasn't annoyed by anything and I think it's well-written. The only ...

To begin with the critical, you say "the man" too many times and there's not enough description. Tell us about the shadows in the house, the sound of the wind ...

Hey. I can see that you've gotten more than your fair share of nitpicks, so I'll lay off on those. I'm just going to tell you all about what I ...

This is very long. I would suggest cutting it down; you'd probably get more reviews that way. Also, from the brief scan I did, I saw a whole lot of ...

Hey, I'm KJ. Honestly, I'm not in the nitpicky mood, so I thought I would just tell you what I really enjoyed about this piece. You ready? Here goes: The ...

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Hi, I'm KJ. I only spotted a few nitpicks. I really liked this, and if you continue feel free to PM me. NITPICKS: And although he wasn’t good-looking or well-moneyed, ...

Hello. I actually liked this. Granted, it was short, and I do feel like you dive into the story a little too fast, but you have nice imagery and your ...