KJ

I don't want to be mean, but there was nothing at all captivating or even interesting about this. Boy likes girl. Girl like boy. Boy asks girl to movie. Girl ...

Nope. I have yet to write it. But I think I will.

I really liked this. You have a great flow and use lovely language to express/show what is happening. I wouldn't call it a description. I didn't see much to go ...

I'll get to the punch: You have many spelling errors, and I don't think you should use capital letters when emphasizing. For a beginning this has far too much narrative. ...

I don't know if there is yet a thread on this particular book, but I just wanted to let everyone out there know that it is AMAZING! I think it's ...

This was way better than the first chapter - I really enjoyed this. Your dialogue is realistic. Only things that caught my notice was that Father Brian said "my dear" ...

This is something I started when I felt that I needed a break from Needles and Roses. I feel that it has some potential - I've got some good twists ...

Hey. I give you points for creativity - it's also thought provoking. You kept me reading, so good job on that. Everyone else has covered grammar and everything else, so ...

Hey. Now, I don't know if this is just the mood I'm in, so don't take this too seriously, but I just couldn't get into it. I thought it kind ...

This is neat. I like it a lot, and it makes me want to go and write something about Little red Riding Hood.

I liked everything but the background... it's too boring and dark for me. It would be better with a more striking, bright background, Ithink. One that will not draw complete ...

I liked it. It's a good short story - why, like a few others have asked, do you claim it unfinished? And I'm really interested to see what you come ...

Hey. I don't have much to say - I didn't notice any typos. My overall impression: it wasn't bad. As a beginning, I think you could have a much stronger ...

About your poll... do you mean would we rather have a vampire be killing the child? How can it be both? And if I had to choose, I guess werewolf, ...

Hey. There were three major problems I had with this. One, your punctuation. Needs much work. You end things like this: "Hello." She said. When it should be: "Hello," she ...