KJ

Okay, I'm back! Let's get started... NITPICKS: Down through the snowy, winding never-ending tree roads south of Boston lays a small town called Lakeville. Too many adjectives in this. The ...

I will come back to this. But wow it's long...

I just finished telling this to another writer: I don't like stories beginning in a classroom. It's too typical. This is just my opinion, of course, but I feel a ...

Hey. I'm short of time, but since no one has reviewed this yet I thought I'd tell you what I think, in general (such as my opinion is). You need ...

NITPICKS: I always was tall, even when I was a kid. I think this would flow better if you switched was and always around so it reads like this: I ...

Just wanted to let everyone who cares to know that Chap. 2 will probably not be completed until a week into the summer. I am swamped with end-of-the-year homework, and ...

Hey. I've read all the chapters, and this is the first one I've commented on, and I'm sorry I'm so unhelpful. I was so sucked into the story that I ...

This is actually one of my favorite chapters because, in my opinion, it's when things begin to get more exciting. There's a huge twist of plot that anyone who's read ...

Hey JFW. Just letting you know that I actually printed this out and suggested a lot of changes, but I have yet to learn how to scan it in - ...

I think you need a better hook. Short stories - because they're so short - need something to catch and keep the reader's attention. This didn't do it for me. ...

Thanks for your comments you guys. I've started progress on 2... but now I'm afraid that you all won't like it as much as you seem to this so it's ...

Cool, I guess. lol. Kind of random, but then again, what art isn't?

I really like it. Short and to the point. It's great.

fier d'être! However, only a little and I don't know all that much of the language. Just a few phrases here and there. And thanks for the compliments. I'll get ...

It's pricey but you won't regret it! Wow, I sound like a salesman :( lol