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Hey Ash. This chapter, though well-written and never dull, bothered me. Just the fact that Carmen is PUSHING her towards Isaac, while before he freaked if they looked at each ...

I just wanted to thank you all for your fabulous reviews. And I have every intention of actually FINISHING this novel. Chap. 3 is now up, for all who care ...

Chapter Three It would be near impossible to find that girl again in a city of such size and population of the one that I happened to be in. And ...

*Note* Has been newly edited. I attempted to describe setting and family better. Hope it improves :)

Thanks, everyone, for your reviews. They are highly appreciated. And to anyone who wishes to continue reading, Chap. 2 is now up. I have already made the recommended changes. I ...

Just in case some of you miss the date, I'm giving you the heads up that this is going back into the past, BEFORE Gen was all set to die, ...

Anytime :) Anyway, I still owe you. So PM me for a critique whenever there's a need.

Ash - much better, and not just because you aren't using my idea anymore lol. I actually think they look and sound better. Keep writing. ANd don't worry, I will ...

*gasp* you like edward more than IAN? Are you INSANE? :( Ian is the most amazing unreal guy EVER. If only he were real. I would leave Edward in the ...

Hey JFW. I don't have time for a proper critique, but I wanted you to know that I read this, and I genuinely enjoyed it. It's sweet, and you style ...

Chapter Two My bones didn’t break. My skin wasn’t scratched or torn. My entire being remained intact. Nothing happened. I didn’t feel a thing . I simply dropped to the ...

A steady clinking reverberated down the long, empty, bone white hallway [should be dash between bone and white]. On the side of the hallway, were many metal doors with rivets ...

Whew. Edited as of 6-22-09. It's been so long since I've worked on this; I'm really excited to get back into the plot. Hope you guys enjoy the rewrite. I ...

Thanks a ton :) I just realized that you're new here on YWS. Just wanted to say welcome, and I hope you benefit from the site. (I know I have.) ...

Hey E. Just wanted to attempt to return the favor for all your edits of my work. NITPICKS: My car had refused to budge, with Al, my next door neighbor ...