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Esmé: Again, another great review from you. I'd actually been thinking about the leadership thing, and the fact that you pointed it out only urges me to fix that little ...

Iya: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. I will take your advice aout adding more tension to the escape, and patch up the only-one-guard thing. When you mentioned that, it ...

Hey. I don't want to repeat what the others have been saying, and completely tear your piece to... well... pieces. Though there IS stock to what they're saying. But don't ...

Chapter Three It had been an eventful, amusing day. Jeff, Keith, Alyssa, and I had all gone to the meadow where we’d always played as pups. The entire time we ...

This was a sweet story. Touching, and you have some lovely language in here. You should expand this. I've actually never read a story where the MC's are deaf. (Wait ...

Chapter Five Ghosts didn’t dream. Whether or not they could, or it was a night-by-night case, I wasn’t sure. But all I knew was that I hadn’t gone a single ...

I want to tear my eyes way form the scene that has unfolded before me, but something in my conscience is not letting me. Misspelled from . Also, instead of ...

Blood… Blood and death, everywhere. Its stench hung distinctly in the air, like a pesky mosquito that just wouldn’t leave you alone [It's probably just because I'm in a picky ...

All three of these quotes have the same thing in common. When you first started out, her hand went through everybody and she could walk through walls, and all that ...

Wow, thanks :) I'm glad you liked it.

lol uh... interesting? No one else seemed to have problems understanding what was going on, somaybe I'm just stupid because I did. It was funny, though, as already stated. I ...

Thanks for keeping up with this, Angel :) And thanks for the compliments lol. They certainly don't hurt.

Chapter Four Death was an unusually cruel circumstance, I was just realizing. Perhaps where I was now actually was Hell. What kind of person—God—would allow someone to remain in a ...

Mostly repeat everything I said in Part One, minus the thing about sex. That was very sad and well done, by the way. I felt bad for the MC. You ...

Hey. Genuinely, I enjoyed this. There were just a few things that stuck out to me: One, you had a few typos. No biggie, but you might want to go ...