KJ

The gates of hell sure didn't seem as scary as I thought it would [Should be they - having the word "it" there implies that there is only one gate]. ...

To begin with the negative, I had two major problems with this. One, your punctuation (but I'm always really picky about that, so if you ever get another review from ...

As critiques go, I'm not going to delve all that deep - I think you've been taken care of in that area :) So all I am going to do ...

Hey Ash. Okay, so I finally got around to this and I only have two things to say, and neither are really things you NEED to change, it would just ...

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Hey Ash. I only have a tiny bit of time, and was only able to scan this, but what I saw I liked. Print this out for me so I ...

Hey. I genuinely liked this. You have a vivid imagination, and some good dialogue. I would suggest a differnt hook, however. I think the one you have doesn't do the ...

Veracell: I really don't appreciate you being so immature. And to think, I'm the same age as you! Or rather, YOU'RE the same age as ME, considering I've seemed to ...

I love the ideas you come up with. This is an interesting piece. Perhaps it was because I was reading too fast, but I didn't catch anything worth pointing out ...