KJ

Hey Sar. Okay, so while I'm disappointed to have missed all the events that happened between the part I left off and now, I enjoyed this. I felt bad for ...

I hope you're happy, those who complained about short length; I made this one much longer. Oh, I changed the human guy's name from Wes to Dane, if any of ...

Chapter Two Sera trembled in the freezing darkness as she gazed up at the tiny opening above her. She couldn’t hear anything of what was happening, but she felt her ...

Me again. It didn't take me long to read this addition; it's pretty short. Don't take that the wrong way - it's a good thing. I don't really like reading ...

Hey Ash - I loved this chapter. I think it might be your best yet. The writing is great, the dialogue is realistic, and your character development is fabulous. I ...

Again, for those of you who follow my work, I know. I shouldn't be starting something new, especially when I have four other stories to keep up with, but I ...

I think accent are fine when someone is speaking, but in the actual narrative I find it annoying, yes. It distracts me form the story. You have many punctuation erros ...

A solid beginning, I think. I enjoyed it. While there wasn't any immediate action - which would have been a nice addition - you pulled off giving us info well. ...

Chapter Seven Caiden wasn’t much of a talker on the road, it turned out. This disappointed me. Most of the time he had headphones on, and I was unable to ...

While I liked it, there wasn't really anything to grab my attention and keep it. I was curious as to why they were all staring at her, but since you ...

I liked the humor of it all, first off. However, this would have been more enjoyable if you'd punctuated it correctly, not to mention formatted it right. I don't view ...

Thank you both for the reviews :) And I know the chapters are getting short; it works better for me that way, because otherwise I feel like I'm dragging it ...

Hey Ash. This part was great; I really enjoyed it. You got some good character development in there for the MC. I liked the atmosphere you created. But the whole ...

Angel of Death - I felt like I owed you for all the reviews you've given me. Granted, I haven't read the first four parts of this, but I still ...

I only have one major problem with this, otherwise I loved it. The problem is this: setting. You say that there is no specific time, it's a fairy tale? But ...