KJ

I really enjoyed this. It's, as stated already, very unique. I was a little confused about who the voices were and where there were exactly (are they inside the MC's ...

Chapter Seven When I padded back into the clearing where all of the Pack slept in their cabins, I felt unreal. I felt as if I’d stepped out of a ...

Chapter Eight Two more days passed without event. Caiden didn’t really speak to me again, other than to encourage my attempts to touch objects. To say that he confused me ...

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Angel and Moonlight: Thanks a ton for reading. I'm glad you like it :) And Angel, I understand. Thanks for letting me know. Moonlight, next chapter in BSBM will be ...

*Edited* Again, I took everyone's suggestions into consideration.

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You're so sad (eye-roll). That market guy had greasy hair and fairly unattractive teeth. But back to topic - You'd better post 10 soon. I want to see what happens ...

First off, I liked how you went back and forth in this piece. Once I was starting to get bored with the MC's reality, I was brought back to her ...

Since the other two have basically covered everything, I'm just going to skip over the preliminaries and give you my overall opinion: It was a good beginning. I thought it ...

Loved the ending. Only found two things wrong with this piece: Adam is there in my dreams, in my thoughts, in every wakening moment. Waking , not wakening The other ...

Hey Ash. I found nothing wrong, really. While I don't think this is your best piece, it isn't your worst. I'm sad that Adam turned out to be such a ...