KJ

I liked it :) I'm in kind of a hurry, so I'm sorry this isn't as thourough as it could be. You need to work on the tenses; they go ...

An insert from Mae Feller’s diary 13th of August, 1681 Father watched me closely today. More closely than usual. I think he knows something. There was a look in his ...

The one thing I love and despise at the same time is reading something and finding no nitpicks. None at all. Because the writer's story isn't benefiting from useless comments ...

Okay, just to get right into it, I think that my major problem with this piece is the atmosphere you've created. Everything and everyone is so... chipper. Even the way ...

Thanks everyone! You've given me much food for thought, and I will go now to edit away before class starts!

Hello yet again, E.B. :) Man, you pop out stories every other second! How do you find the time to eat and sleep? :P Okay, just going to dive right ...

I have a piece in Fantasy Fiction that I'd like more input on. It's called My Blood, My Truth, so if you have time, it would be awesome if you ...

You got the wrong end of the stick KJ, the woman isn't going to die. Her baby died inside her and she has to deliver it still born. Thanks for ...

Hi, JK. I read your piece and was genuinely surpised to discover no real nitpicks. There is this: Her face broke into a joyful smile, her eyes were sparkling--and it ...

So I'm kind of posting this as a short story on YWS, but it's really a self-experience essay I need to do for Engish class. What my teachers wants is ...

Hi, Dreamworx. I'm just going to dive right into this: The girls' behavior and conversation is very... flightly. Very young girls might act like this, but I don't know how ...

Where are your commas? I must know. Have they run off and hidden from you? “I know, I know” she laughs You do this a lot. A lot, a lot. ...

Hi, Elinor Brynn. Just dropped in to give you a quick review. First off, I don't really agree with Miss Ching on the part about your introduction. Honestly, I didn't ...

Hi, Shina :) It's been a while since we've talked. I miss you! How are things going? I see you've been doing a whole lot of reviewing, but how's your ...

Hey, EmmaJane. I lied in my PM, I guess. Found time to get to this tonight! Anyway, there wasn't much, and I hate repeating myself, but again... I liked it. ...