KJ

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You have a talent, that's for sure. Just a few things: I thought the part where you told us of the Goddess killing all the others powerful Gods was too ...

Only thing I really spotted that was worth pointing out was this small blurb: The silver fence shined under the sunlight that made its way past the clouds. Should be ...

Miked: Thanks for the pointers. You've been really helpful; I never would have caught all of that :) Also, to your last comment, about me calling them all male/female vampyres? ...

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As the others said, very unique. I liked how it was in 'The Place's' point of view. A few tips: Reread your post once it's out. There were several typos ...

Maybe I'm just immature and dumb, but I really didn't understand half this story. I do like how quirky and unique your MC is, but he confused me pretty often. ...

Mnesomeye: Unfortunately, this story does not end entirely happy. So if you like happy endings... that sucks :( And I'll have to check out that book. Thanks for the recommendation. ...

Yes, KJ has done it again. Despite all the other stories I have begun and showed to you and promised to continue, I've written something new. Slap my hand once ...

This would be much better if (can't believe I'm going to say this) you drag it out. Instead of telling us everything, make it a STORY, as I'm sure you ...

JUST A FEW NITPICKS: “What the hell is wrong with you? You dropped a plate; it’s not a big deal.” She said Jut a punctuation mistake here. Should be: It's ...

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Hey. I didn't read the piece yet, because I have to get to class, but I thought I should let you guys know that The Awakening is the title of ...

"Are you done staring?" the woman suddenly asked in a sparrow-like voice. This is the only thing that really stuck out like a sore thumb to me. How is her ...

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