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Too many semi-colons, first off. But the main thing that caught my attention was how human-like these otters are, and that didn't seem like what you would want. These are ...

Did you mean to capitalize "IT"? Because if so, I think you should just Italicize instead, to punctuate. Now the only thing I found wrong or off, really, is this: ...

Singer: Thanks for reading :) I'm glad you like it, and thanks for your comments. Actually, you're not supose dto knwo what the kids are whispering about - you'll fin ...

While this was interesting, I want to point out that the dialogue is way too melodramatic. It may be what you think fits your time and setting and all that, ...

I really have no critiques on this, but rather a few strong opinions. And I will just apologize in advance if this sounds harsh - I'm in a hurry. This ...

Yeah, there is something wrong with that back right leg. I would suggest darkening the muscoles beneath it to make it evident that it's bent? Other than that, I spotted ...

Tatra: Thanks a lot for the past two reviews. They were excellent, and you made some good points :) Hope you enjoy the rest.

Chapter Three She watched as they pillaged the sacred alters. There wasn’t much, but what was there they took and shoved into their sacks. The clay bowls. The candles. The ...

It's a little flat. I would suggest shading and tone to make it seem more 3-D. She doesn't have life yet.

Funny. I like all the color.

The three of us, Adam, Landon, and myself were in the “turning room” [Comma] as we so solemnly nickname it. Adam sat down in the chair and we bound him ...

She put on an extra spurt of speed. This was all I found that no one else mentioned, I don't think. It's just awkward, the whole "put on" phrase. How ...

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