KJ

Hey, it's KJ. Here at your request and by an honorary sense of obligation since you have done the same for me :) NITPICKS: “I requested that he leave . ...

Since I really didn't want to take on the nitpicks for this piece - there would be many - I'm just going to give you some general advice. Work on ...

This beginning, quite honestly, is too cliche. We've seen the fairy tales, we've read this before. Even the idea of a rebellious princess has been done - several times. To ...

I tried to cut this in half again, because I know it's a long time to be looking at a computer screen, but I really couldn't find a good spot. ...

Thanks you two. And Sela - thanks for being honest. But I actually do think that Autumn is a little different. She just doesn't emerge and show this until later... ...

This is not the entire first chapter, because it was a little too lengthy for YWS. And I'm not sure that I'll continue posting this, because I'm keeping it on ...

Aw, that puppy is adorable! :lol: Thanks for showing me. And I don't mind knowing more about everyone else! Love the details. And I can't remember who asked me - ...

Hello Angel! I"m glad you found this site, too :)

I'm following the example of my fellow YWS people and introducing myself, despite the fact that I've been on this site for a while. I'm KJ (Kelsey Jo, ugh). I'm ...

This isn't really a picture. It's just words slapped on an odd background. I would take a photograph that has more meaning, and something that actually has something to do ...

THIS one is my favorite of yours, Paige. It seems more genuine. But again, it is annoyingly fuzzy, and I would try to use a brush and smooth that wrinkle ...

They're a little fuzzy. And I don't like how only a slice of your eye is showing in the last one. It would be better if you either have the ...

Okay, I did like it, but the ending I found troubling. All that ran through my mildly annoyed mind was WHY. WHY did she just jump up and kiss him? ...

Hi. Since you don't want nitpicks (and you've already had more than enough) I'll just add this: I think your intro could use some work. While I do enjoy stories ...

All of you poor Inconcessus readers: I've seen this baby up to over half the manuscript! Ha! Sorry. Just wanted to have a moment to immaturely gloat. But this story ...