KJ

EDITED Let me know if the grammar is better :)

Chapter One To fight is to not. To not let your opponent to see your emotions, to not let them anticipate your next move. To not show mercy, to not ...

Demon and Beast William Butler Yeats For certain minutes at the least That crafty demon and that loud beast That plague me day and night Ran out of my sight; ...

Hi. Since you've had nitpicks and plot reviews, I just wanted to give you my take on the style here. First off, I love the way you began. Usually I ...

Since this is so short, I'm going to be really picky! The blanket of fog over the port was the early grey of dawn. The air hung heavy with moisture, ...

Hi :) I really like how open you left this. At the end of the chapter there are so many possibilities, so many places this story could go. I'm excited ...

Hello, KJ. At first I have to admit I didn't find the poem very interesting. It had some nice imagery from the beginning, but it seemed to be like so ...

Clear and empty, standing tall, Fragile glass that light falls through. Clink, clink. So many possibilities, like grains of sand on a beach. The empty jar calls, pleads, lonely beyond ...

Cobwebs in the corners darkness filled the air I crept in like a fog uncertain and insubstansial. Your sobs were tiny and dry your body a lump The bed once ...

I drew my sword, shut my eyes , and listened. All I could hear was my own breathing and that was it . Then all of a sudden I heard ...

Well, this was short - maybe too short to really give you a thorough review about the piece. Your plot has only emerged the tinsiest bit and there's not much ...

Chapter One “Akelda.” She didn’t know how to tell me. I watched her struggle inside, opening and closing her mouth like a dying fish. I didn’t help her. The pain ...

Elena stared blankly at the wall [Where is she? Is she staring at a classroom wall?] . The moment when he, Daniel, the most popular guy in school had asked ...

Hey, this is a quickie review (sorry, I'll try my best to do a better one later). I just wanted you to know I'm still reading and loving every bit ...

This is the best story ever!! Keep writing!! I love it!!! :elephant: Thanks :) New chapter is up.