KEMPTON

I agree with that other post. I though this was gonna be some huge thing about personal b. s. And about someone screaming for attention. On the contrary, this was ...

is this a vampire reference? very existential, but great adjectives and flow, good poem!!

These are good lyrics. At first, I thought you were talking about a literal war. But then I saw were you were going, and i this song reminds me of ...

[VERSE 1] I've been here before I've seen these streets, and I've seen these doors It's the colors running on the ground It's the simple sights and the little sounds ...

Thanks for the feedback guys. Pen, I've never really read any poetry other than band lyrics, but I will definitely check out those existentialist writers you suggested!

For the Being aware, Nightfall brings about a native truth. Dawn shines a blinding light upon the mundane circus of normality, The lives we lead, lead our lives. Our unstoppable, ...

(VERSE 1) I've got these troubles in my head I've been a little off lately So get a good look and take a guess You don't have much grace, but ...

This is REALLY cool! I felt like I could connect with the perspective of the lyrics, and relate to your observations of feeling and quarrel. And the middle stanza reminded ...

I don't know you if you listen to him, but these lyrics remind me of Adam Young, very colorful and kinda flamboyant. I might suggest that you could make your ...

looks like some carefully selected words in the first few stanzas, they seem to fit just right. These lyrics make me feel a sense of progression, I could see these ...

Maybe consider the last line to be "I've seen a thousand like you." But, cool idea nonetheless.

Well I clicked on this at first, because I noticed the title of a Guns N' Roses song. But I read your opening explanation, and saw that you simply lacked ...

This is a good arrangement, and I like your choice of lyrics. I don't know why, but when I was reading this it sounded to me like a vocal part ...

Thanks for the review, its very helpful!

Great use of adjectives to instill the imagery! I liked how this piece started off in a very direct and vague manner, before honing in on the generalization.