Justagirl

Why i despise you, You turn to me and ask with a sarcastic , evil smile that will never make me feel good inside " Why can't we be friends? ...

In the first two lines do you mean "is" not "it's"? In the third paragraph the first two lines seem like they're supposed to rhyme but they don't which throws ...

Oh. Ok. Thanks for explaining!! Keep writing, Alzora

OMG!! This is creepy but cool at the same time... Nice, I likey :) Keep writing, Alzora

That is a really cool picture! Did you draw that?? Keep drawing, Alzora

This is a wonderful poem!! I have no nit-picks and don't see anything wrong with it!! Good job! Keep writing, Alzora

Yay!! The story is getting more interesting!! I'm pulled towards it like a moth to light... :D By the way, what is so bad about Luke being adopted? Keep writing, ...

Wow. Depressing poem... I like it :D. I my self write many a depressing poem. Welcome to the depressing poet world... Keep writing, Alzora

I saw icicles harden. The thick , white sheet Nice poem!! I liked it. The way that you incorporated snow with other things... Good ;) Keep writing, Alzora

Subtract me from you and we get angry and depressed . W e know we belong together and can't be apart , we might be mad in our life time ...

My only nit-pick is the grammar. You have one comma. You need more!!! Other than that this poem is really awesome!!! I love it :D Keep writing, Alzora

This. Poem. Is. Wonderful. Really. WONDERFUL!!! So... Yeah. I love it. Keep writing!!! Alzora

This is ok... It would be better with more emotion... I think.. I can't put my finger on what would make it better. Oh well. Keep writing, Alzora

I don't think this poem needs much work, it's really nice the way it is. One thing though - are you talking about your friend, or are you talking about ...

Perhaps I will close my eyes and dream in silence a nd alone...I might drag my fingers through grass a nd then I'll want to kiss you and stay there. ...