Justagirl

*Shivers* were you a louse in a past life or something because this seems pretty accurate... ;) Well, I don't see what the large text in the beginning is for ...

Very interesting story but I think it would belong better in a different category of short stories. Go through it and check all the grammar, punctuation, and capitalization and I ...

I know by exterminating it, the world will be frozen, and therefor e saved from destruction. I know they have TNT and they’ll be using it soon. Good thing I ...

Wow. That was wonderfully descriptive and I really loved it. If you just revise it a bit to take care of some capitalization, punctuation, and grammar issues then it would ...

Cool poem. I don't really understand the first stanza though - what's that all about? Also, the flow is a bit off. But overall I like it, it's really cool ...

Awesome poem. I really like it and I think you just need to go through and check the grammar and punctuation and it'll be even better :D Keep writing, Alzora

This is sweet and I like it a lot. Just go through check the grammar, capitalization, and punctuation then you'll be golden dahlin'. :D Keep writing, Alzora

Lives lived, and then they’re gone, days seem to crawl, but it’s a lie. You should put a break somewhere in here. We wish for things; think time’s too slow ...

a sentence I can't find , for the feelings deep inside my heart . Then add the break. I really like this poem. The emotion is very nice and the ...

silently . slowly . aware . Not solid anymore , you're see - through. Interesting poem. I didn't really get what it was about but I think the word structure ...

Interesting. Try reading through it to revise it because I think it needs a bit of that, ok? Pretty good though! Keep writing, Alzora

He left me such a wr e ck , Lost and alone . I had fallen off track . (What does this part mean? Did she fall off trakc with ...

Your hand grips onto my hair, (Took out the space between 'on' and 'to'.) Your hand grips on to my hair, Just like you really care. How does that have ...

Hearing "6742" down the halls ruined my self esteem. Huh? What's the number mean? My one chance, at my dream. Just one action is what got me (Took out a ...

But alone in society . Cutting away the flesh (I took out a comma here) You used to have . Alone and eternally cold . As if you never lived ...