Justagirl

One cross (I took out an "s" here) , one dirty look, one little perceived wrong And you wonder you r teasing Aaaaw, poor girl. That worries her, frightens her, ...

Very nice. The emotion was great and I saw no problems with it but I do think that it should be in Narrative Poetry. Other than that I think the ...

and everything is wron g and lots of lies This line breaks the flow of it all. Ok, you need a couple of breaks here. Just like everyone has said. ...

Well, you already know all my thoughts on this but I feel the need to post a review anyways. I see no problems with any of it and I really ...

*Scream* I don't wanna be eaten!!!!!! Very nice poem, dark and sinister and eeeevil. I liked it. I saw no mistakes and the whole thing flowed really well, so there's ...

Aaaaw! I love this story! I saw no problems with it and I really love the way the whole thing is put together. It all agrees with itself and there's ...

Great poem. The second stanza puts off the flow so you should go through it and try to even it out a bit. But other than that I saw absolutely ...

I feel your tears stream down my face (I took out the 'on' that was in here) This is a really great poem. The emotion is wonderful and the flow ...

Aaaaw, that's cute! All you need is some punctuation and it'll be better than ever. Great job on it over all though. I liked it and it is relate-able. So, ...

I picke d it up and started to hack away at the chain but knew nothing would happen. Very interesting story... In the first paragraph you use the word "feet" ...

LOL, this is so funny and true. I didn't see any problems with it and the whole thing was totally enjoyable to read. Great job! Keep writing, Alzora If you ...

Interesting poem! The first line immediately puts off the flow and for the rest of the poem little things do the same. But if you fix that first line (review ...

This is really great! I'm not at all sure what a sonnet is but this is a very nice poem even if it doesn't reach the requierments for a sonnet. ...

Ok, you really need some punctuation in this!!! Other than that, though, this is pretty good! The flow could use some tweaking but the emotion and grammar is beautiful. I ...

I don't know what it's like to be in your shoes, but once you're in mine, oh you'll know. I really like this line :) I love this poem but ...