Justagirl

So, so true. If you arranged this a little differently.... Relationships are like cars, the brakes will stop you but the w h eels will get you going and keep ...

Wow, this is really great. I think with some tweaking you could turn this into some excellent poetry or post it in the short story section. Your imagery is wonderful ...

Lol, this is a funny joke - nice job with it. But, like Ninja has done, you need to put it in correct grammar - ok? So, she's already shown ...

Interesting poem. I think that you should definetly go through and revise the whole thing because you got a couple of grammatical and spelling errors. Also, it doesn't flow very ...

The first is great, but the second is even better. 1. (The first) The flow of this one is very nice. But, yes, it does need more imagery. There is ...

Cool. The flow was wonderful, there was great amounts of emotion, and no grammatical errors (that I could see). This poem was really great and I loved the last stanza... ...

memories of her sick and weak . M emories of how hard it was to take action, to take everything for granted was the motto for each day. Memories of ...

Awesome poem. The only thing you need to do is add punctuation and capitalization! Otherwise I think it flows really well and the whole thing fits together wonderfully. Great job ...

Some will walk by , not taking even a glance. Wow, this is an awesome poem. I saw no other problems other than the on I already pointed out above. ...

Nice poem. The whole thing is pretty great, I can feel the emotion in it but it's (sadly) not that strong. Also, the flow is off - a lot. You ...

Interesting poem, Throughout the whole thing I saw only 1 comma. Only 1!?! You need a lot more punctuation in it, but luckily your flow is ok. Also, you don't ...

Ok, You need to take out a ton of periods, put in commas, and capitalize LOTS of words. But don't sweat it, everything else seems fine. I understand the poem ...

Alicia had just burst out crying in the middle of class, she didn't want to but, she just couldn't take it anymore! "Ms . , can I go to the ...

Ok... So, this was an interesting poem and I saw no grammatical problems with it. I don't really know what it's supposed to be about, though, and the flow is ...

Wow, this was different. I really liked this poem and I found nothing wrong with it. The flow was pretty good and all grammar was great. I think you could ...