Justagirl

Wow, great poem. The emotion is really awesome and your flow is just perfect. Your imagery is pretty good but maybe a few more emotion bits would make it better. ...

It seems Im doing my best work before I go to sleep. I jotted this one down before I hit the hay last night, I revised it a tiny bit ...

We laugh and smile, we cry and feel sad, This is a good poem. You have a good amount of emotion in it but it lacks flow. Luckily the whole ...

Wow, this is really great. The only thing that interrupts it's flow is... To smoothly flowing, This part. The 'to' in this interrupts flow of the rest of it. Otherwise ...

Great emotion in this one :) This really needs better flow though. I have lots of poems that, when I wrote them, I had so much emotion in me that ...

I laughed a little. “Sure, Nudge …let’s go. Remember, stay alert guys.” Mmm…Mexican food, I have to say, i s awesome. We had to keep passing each other napkins , ...

LOL! Um... Harry's mother is dead - how can Snape be spending time with her? Anywyas, once again, everyone else has pointed out the grammatical errors so I shall point ...

Since everyone else has already pointed out all the grammar mistakes I'll point out the parts I like... :) "What does it look like i'm doing, i'm taking Bella for ...

Lol, Since you said not to say anything about the grammar - I won't. I will just congratulate you. This was actually, genuinely funny :). I am now going to ...

Aaaw, this is kind of sweet! I didn't see any problems and the whole actually made lots of sense, so congrats. I also love how you developed Draco. He's (one ...

Great job! I only wonder what the prologue had to do with the first chapter. The only thing that was the same was a cat's name (I'm assuming it was ...

The sun was shining, the air was clear of pollution, the water was a bit murky and suspicious looking , but that was nothing unusual, besides which, the Grail would ...

White- E ar reviewed the patrol and flicked his tail with approval. ^That's the only problem I found in it :) This is really good, but it's way to short. ...

8/10 Cool/True :)

Unfortunately they came back to life because the warlock (that died a page ago - he was killed by ninja cookies) had cast a weird spell on the soup.