Justagirl

The rank stink of alcohol This line breaks up the flow a bit. The sticky heat clinging to her skin Try and find a shorter way to say this? Like, ...

Great poem! I kind of love it when you mean it to be something then it turns out to be something else. Don't you? Anyways, I saw no problems with ...

Wow, sorry for the quadruple post :( -Alzora

Very interesting poem. I love the emotion in it and the flow is also pretty good. The one thing you need to add is less commas and more periods. Just ...

Again, I have to write a poem for language arts and... So... Here it is.. I guess. :) Autumn Lifting me off the ground, with the colorful leaves of the ...

These are really great! One question - what language does PARE mean STOP? 1. This is very nice and I like the editing you did for this one. The mailbox ...

(Justagirl, the theme is authors not music artists XD ) O - Obert Skye Really? Wow, I'm clueless. Sorry! (No, I didn't put an author here... Leaving this forum - ...

Long, straight blond hair, greenish-greyish-brownish eyes. Short.

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2/10 interesting song names but I've never heard of any of them. 1. Oh L'Amour - Erasure 2. Look At Us - Sonny & Cher 3. I See You - ...

Unfortunately in the middle of his teleportation he was intercepted by a large spaceship.

Is the water cold or hot?

This is really good! I think you're getting better... ;) Just a couple of things.... a virgin pure as salt of the sea! You really don't need a exclamation mark ...

Wow, this is so cool . The only thing I don't really like with these pics is that they just don't seem very sharp... It's probably just your camera though ...

Wow, these are amazing. The droplets really do look sweet! Like little strawberries or something, yum :) And the watch is unbelievable. How did you get so close up to ...