JustDance

It's nice. You need a rhytm though. It has to rhyme. I liked it though, cause it showed your feelings. How about some imagery though? Like his smile brighter than ...

It's ok. It needs to have a beat though.

anymore reviews???

Thanks Sofi! You helped a lot, && I never knew I had those mistakes. Thank you! =]

Yeah, I get the spelling thing. For the character thing, I had his mother say, "Have a good day Adam!" in the second paragraph. Adam is a boy name, so ...

Hmph. You've got a lot of learning to do, missy. First of all-- have a good, long look at our rules here. We've got Greeters (those friendly people whose names ...

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C'mon guys comments??? Also please do criticize, I want to become a better writer. Reminder: While writing this story I was in a rush, so you might find a few ...