JustACanvas

Yes! Post a part 2. You can't end it like that, the build up to that moment just makes you want to read on. Post a part 2 soon :) ...

More? :) -jac

All I could think when i read that line where she says she loves him but loves Sean too was 'noo' especially since hed gone back to her! That was ...

I really like the begining of this as it actually made me want to read on. You get a lot of stories, or openings, which you think 'aaa i cant ...

Can I join? Depending on how gruesome the murder I'd still prefer it to taking my own life. Murdered by the one I thought I could trust. Would you rather ...

More? I really enjoyed that and want to read on :) is part two around yet? -J.A.C

I've read quite a few of your post in the romance section and this is the first one where I thought "mmmm I would like to comment." I like the ...

Ahhhhh. I actually loved this. The originality was so refreshing, it's really quite clever and the best part is the simplicity; this makes it almost beautiful :) Who knew you ...

After reading this I'd love for you to look at my pieces of writing. Even though I doubt you use this forum and that people actually understood what you were ...

I couldn't help but post here and say this is very interesting I love the use of ''her'' and ''she'' as it shows the distance between each other yet the ...

Heyy, just wanted to say I can see the effect you are trying to have but as ziggiefred pointed out the first paragraphs should entice the reader into the story ...

Is there more of this posted on here? I'd love to read it send me a link? If not you should put some up because I want to know how ...

Write some more of this please!! I don't understand her reasoning for hating him in the first part but as you read on you want to know more. Your writing ...

Personally to me the end was about the memories he (the person she is talking about) possesses whether that be a physical box or not. Just like her box is ...

I think it sounded rather poetic, especially with the mystery of the characters being so apparent. i found the structure a little all over the place - arguably that could ...