JuneIparis

this is quite good for a draft that came together after a year off-writing. but, as i think you would agree, there are some flaws. your first paragraph, which should ...

now I'm going to start by this. I LOVE destroying a tearing apart manuscripts and pointing out every single flaw in a paragraph. but I must admit, your story was ...

First let me start this off with the thought that popped in my head the moment I finished the first line. Wow. This is marvelous piece, filled with emotions and ...